Monday, February 04, 2008
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every minute from this minute now
I LOVE YOUR SIGNATURE, she had said. It’s curvy. It’s curly. It’s expressive, she had said. That was all before little Jimmy Hearst got his stomach pumped after drinking too much tincture, before my uncle’s lifelong partner and consort accidentally rammed her car halfway into the backyard of the house on the corner of Second Avenue, and right about the time after my fat friend Bill jumped out of his seventeenth-story window leaving for work after developing a sudden fear for elevators and narrow staircases, and lived to tell about it, getting up from the fall none the least bit shaken, instead exclaiming hurrah hurrah gravity is not king.
An uneventful life is unknown to me, I had told my father on the telephone while I was nursing the burn wounds of Pup, my Doberman, the ones it got after it decided to jump on the stove. Do be careful, the storm’s coming in tonight, it’ll be wet it’ll be slippery, my father had said. Worry not, I had answered unperturbed, for that’s what galoshes and ponchos and blow dryers are for. And we had hung up. That was when she came pounding on my door after driving six hours from Nowheresville. I got your letter, she panted through the door. I love your signature, she said. It’s curvy. It’s curly. It’s expressive, she said. I haven’t slept a wink since you’ve been gone, she wheezed. And I had imagined her behind there, excitable, gasping blue-faced. From a lack of oxygen, I would have pointed out. But then she had skittered down and out, gone forever before I could say anything.
I had found myself drowsy in the easy chair afterwards, awoken the next morning in daylight by the meteorologist on the radio squawking it’s wet outside, a little slippery, it rained overnight and a cold front moved in from the west so do be careful, and also by thoughts of the wayward girl who whimpered for me through the closed door, the one who used to tear clothes off of herself and cry liberation when she was feisty, never one to say get your filthy maws off me, not even when she looked like a mess at three or four in the morning when she would be all petered out from wrecking her mind in enthusiasm during the day, how I have none of this anymore because she pleaded for me to stay while I begged for her to go, back when water from the overnight storms still leaked from our patched ceiling as we had breakfast in bed with the curtains open, and we were fine with that.
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I feel so sorry for little Jimmy Hearst. What happened to the girl, btw?
There's a tinge of Carver-ism to this piece.
"...wayward girl who whimpered for me through the closed door, the one who used to tear clothes off of herself and cry liberation when she was feisty, never one to say get your filthy maws off me..."
I am in love with this sentence. I'd strip it down and sleep with every filthy word if I could.
i can see this one turning into a novel of sorts. i like the last paragraph the most... especially the part about her wanting to stay and you (narrator) begging for her to go... it usually ends up reversed after the fact.
ryc: sounds like fun, doesn't it? ;)
There's just so much depth to all your pieces, so many things you which you allude.
"I haven’t slept a wink since you’ve been gone." Are you perhaps a Nightmare of You fan? That is a lyric in one of their songs.
but did she stay or go?
thanks.
this is quite good. the thing i like most about your writing is that it makes think beyond it. you give this short glimpse of something in a couple of paragraphs, and leave it up to the reader to fill in the rest.
so it's nice to decide for myself that she left and it's nice to decide for myself why she did. and why you wanted her to.
keep it up, it's great.
hurrah hurrah gravity is not king. fantastic! i really love how you alternately spurn and abuse punctuation at whim.
hurrah hurrah vince is king of lambent prose. :)
You make me think of a book I'm reading called The Thirteenth Tale.
Is it all just a story, or is there a grain of truth to be found? What do you write about?
Ah!! I'm so glad Dan (atsixesandsevens) found you! He's quite a writer himself! Finally the two great writers meet! (yay).
Yes, I'm glad you see it too. I was afraid you'd think I was off with Carver-esque/Carver-ism thing.
RYC: copy and paste, Vince! Copy and paste. Hrmm. Now I'll never know about your insight on idealism. Garrr.
Eh, it didn't work.
hm this one makes me feel hm...
valentines shmalentines, i'm with ya...i was gonna buy him moo shoes anyhow-so why the heckyl and jeckyl are mag pies not sync into the vibe and make them a gift for v-dayAnd now,
On reflection...
What is he ok with?
Ryc: desperation...
Hmm, that gave me an idea
Zain
Steely determination as the rain comes down, again. I don't have much to say, but I enjoyed your story.
hurrah hurrah indeed
Great story! You always keep me mezmorized.....
You never miss something until it's gone...
I like that the narrorator says he's never had an uneventful life.
I love this, as I love all your writing, but the way you paint the complexities of relationship with these sparse strokes is simply masterful.
this is the type of thing i'd read in a book. Feel every emotion, love every word. You just might be inspiration to get me writing again.
i'll read this later on but i wrote mine in a rush and just re-read it and realized it sounds like a school report ha! it was more just to get some details down than for the audience so what's it matter anyway. it'll be gone later on and replaced with something shorter and vague-er and that's how things work. i'll read this later on though. i'm always so excited when you have a new one up.
I saw you stopped by my site. I'm glad you did. I like what I'm reading here. I really enjoyed that last paragraph. I could see it.
"Edgar Allan Poe on an optimistic day"
I could hug you. [you know, in a dark and gloomy sort of way]
holy snap-i just figured out your screen name....i'm a quick one.
I'm glad I subbed to you. That was so rich and textured, like memories and fast forwards flipping through my head, a slideshow.
I think you should put together a book of all of your short short stories. I love them.